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PostSubject: A Tale of Iron Discussion   May 15th 2014, 2:54 am

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PostSubject: a tale of iron discussion   May 27th 2014, 12:01 am

this has been so hilarious. The only issue that I have is my character, I don't mind the jabs at all the talking that I do but the content of those paragraphs seem way too random and make little sense. They make my character seem stupid as shit, but he should be much more intelligent. There are some characters that are idiotic most of the time but very serious and somewhat smart when it comes to battle, but that fits their profile. You seem to not have made up your mind if he is an idiot or an intelligent person. There is a difference between getting off track and talking nonsense. I might be coming off mad but I'm not. I think that this could be hindering the overall quality of the fic.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   May 27th 2014, 12:27 pm

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this has been so hilarious.  The only issue that I have is my character, I don't mind the jabs at all the talking that I do but the content of those paragraphs seem way too random and make little sense.  They make my character seem stupid as shit, but he should be much more intelligent.  There are some characters that are idiotic most of the time but very serious and somewhat smart when it comes to battle, but that fits their profile.  You seem to not have made up your mind if he is an idiot or an intelligent person. There is a difference between getting off track and talking nonsense.  I might be coming off mad but I'm not.  I think that this could be hindering the overall quality of the fic.  

Okay, thanks. Taking that into consideration. That definitely wasn't my intent. I was going more for trying to make things kinda silly to hook the readers with the first two chapters so that they stay for the rest of it where I can develop everyone. No one in the group is going to be stupid per say, as I don't think any one of us are dumb (just each of us weaker in some areas). Some of us will opt for more silly moments, but not in stupidity. I will get better at writing these characters as I go too.

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   September 15th 2014, 12:16 pm

Good chapter, but there was a paragraph that seemed to be worded incorrectly.

"Solomon and Erosion start fighting each other. Meanwhile, Solomon and Vito are exchanging attacks and blocking each other’s. Vito lands two punches and in exchange Mars lands a stronger punch that sends him sliding back towards Aerona."

It seems that the second appearance of Solomon should be Mars instead.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   September 15th 2014, 7:39 pm

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Good chapter, but there was a paragraph that seemed to be worded incorrectly.

"Solomon and Erosion start fighting each other. Meanwhile, Solomon and Vito are exchanging attacks and blocking each other’s. Vito lands two punches and in exchange Mars lands a stronger punch that sends him sliding back towards Aerona."

It seems that the second appearance of Solomon should be Mars instead.

Didn't you know? You can use Shadow Clones. Good catch. Fixed. Thanks for letting me know.

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   December 23rd 2014, 4:16 pm

Another good chapter, can't wait for the next one.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   February 22nd 2015, 3:15 am

Great chapter, and shit just got very real!
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   April 4th 2015, 11:32 am

It looks like our heroes are in deep deep shit.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   April 7th 2015, 10:43 am

That was a great chapter. I can't wait till the next one comes out.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   May 9th 2015, 6:27 pm

Avengers crossover discussion can go here, just because I don't feel like having another topic for it.

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PostSubject: Re: Crossover Special: The Avengers   May 10th 2015, 10:35 am

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Avengers crossover discussion can go here, just because I don't feel like having another topic for it.

First of all it was your best work yet. Second, when is the next part coming out?
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   May 10th 2015, 10:37 am

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Strider Zero wrote:
Avengers crossover discussion can go here, just because I don't feel like having another topic for it.

First of all it was your best work yet.  Second, when is the next part coming out?

Thanks a lot. I'm not sure when I'll drum up the motivation to do the next part. I don't plan on doing it right away, that's for sure.

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   June 7th 2015, 10:11 am

Great first chapter of part 2. Can't wait for more
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   June 8th 2015, 2:15 pm

Another good chapter that once again shows that your are truly a superb writer.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   June 12th 2015, 12:03 pm

Good chapter! The battle was well done, and the hinting of the dark past was good. Of course that is might be a little too convenient that one of your character gets hinted at having a dark past shortly after a dark past is revealed in my fic.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   June 12th 2015, 12:12 pm

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Good chapter!  The battle was well done, and the hinting of the dark past was good.  Of course that is might be a little too convenient that one of your character gets hinted at having a dark past shortly after a dark past is revealed in my fic.

Oh, I can assure you, they're nothing alike. Oh and the chapter was written in full on the 7th, so I didn't know at that time that you'd be releasing that chapter Panda lol

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   July 30th 2015, 9:52 am

What the Hell?! Why did you have to viciously stab me right in the feels? Her back story was extremely sad. I would say that it could even rival an Oda tragic backstory. I can't wait for more.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   January 11th 2016, 1:59 pm

Holy shit! Tale of Iron comes back with a vengeance!
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   January 12th 2016, 11:26 pm

Tale of Iron part 2 seems to be much darker than part 1. Having said that, part 2 seems like it might get even darker.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   January 13th 2016, 1:21 am

Considering where they're going next chapter, I think we can take that statement literally.

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   February 10th 2016, 1:55 pm

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   February 29th 2016, 2:51 pm

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   March 14th 2016, 1:25 am

This arc is getting really good really fast. I can't wait for what happens next.
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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   March 28th 2016, 5:32 pm

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PostSubject: Re: A Tale of Iron Discussion   April 6th 2016, 4:20 pm

Good Chapter, the twins are fucking weird and creepy little fucks.
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